In this great scheme of things you actually secure a B- just for effort. Where exactly you lost everybody was in your details. As it is said, details make or break the argument.. And that couldn't be much more correct at this point. Having said that, allow me say to you just what exactly did do the job. Your text is highly persuasive and that is most likely the reason why I am taking an effort in order to comment. I do not really make it a regular habit of doing that. Second, although I can notice a jumps in logic you come up with, I am not really confident of how you seem to connect your details which inturn help to make the conclusion. For right now I will, no doubt yield to your position but trust in the foreseeable future you actually connect your facts much better.